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Some believe that people who do physical work should be paid on par with the people who have high level degree. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is thought by some that remuneration should be made on the same basis for both skilled and unskilled workers. Basically, salary should be based on their productivity. In my opinion, I completely agree with
this
 view because it would encourage professionals to be more hard working and in return enhance the company's growth.
To begin
 with, educated workers should be remunerated according to their task achievements exactly like the artisans in the society. In fact,
this
 is because many educated
workers mainly
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workers, mainly
 aim to make money and are often prepared to achieve given assignments if financial incentives are rewarded for
this
 purpose.
This
, in turn, would increase the
companies
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company's
 general performance as more skilled employees
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their official commitments at due time.
For instance
, in a commercial organization where the salary of the sales executive is proportionate to the number of products sold.
This
 particular staff would always strive hard to sell more so as to get more pay.
Therefore
, it is obvious
this
 approach would greatly increase sales and result in
increase
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an increase
 in
company's profits
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the company's profits
. Another point to consider is that most professionals and university degree holders are often non-chalant about their jobs because their salaries are not
ties
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tied
 to their weekly or monthly performance. The most effective way to curb
this
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 is to
based
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base
 their monthly income on their performance.
This
 would help to motivate them to put their best and at the same time become hardworking. In conclusion, financial compensation should be given based on outputs for both illiterate and educated staff as
this
 is a win-win situation; it would lead to increase in company's productivity and
also
 the employees would have more money to take home.
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