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Some people believe that if people are allowed to work after the age of 60, it could cause problems. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #work #age
In
this
 inflation era, everyone doing
job
 in fulfilling their needs.
However
, few people vocalize that after 60 years people should get retirement. I am in consummate accord with
this
 notion. In my upcoming writing, I will delineate my viewpoint.
To begin
 with, it is generally seen that above 60 years people started
become
Suggestion
to become
becoming
 lethargic. As they can not
accomplished
Suggestion
accomplish
 their task on
job
Suggestion
the job
. Owing to which companies
may stuck
Suggestion
may stick
 into any financial hurdles.
Also
, it will bring up opportunities of
permotion
a message issued in behalf of some product or cause or idea or person or institution
promotion
 in the
job career
Accept comma addition
job, career
 of other staff members. In other word if
peole
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
 will leave
job
Suggestion
the job
a job
 after 60
then
 other staff members can get
higher designation
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the higher designation
. So, they
will do work
Suggestion
will work
 with more dedication
on
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to
 their
job
. Probing ahead, youngsters will get a
jobs
Suggestion
job, then
job then
then
 rate of an unemployment will be declined in
nation
Suggestion
the nation
.
Moreover
, everyone
know
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knows
 that youngsters have remarkable intellectual skills.
Hence
, they can give new ideas and direction to
country
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the country
. Apart from
this
, in
this
technosavy
 world, all local and international companies use electronic gadgets in their work field. While, lack of knowledge how to use gadgets
greay
of an achromatic color of any lightness intermediate between the extremes of white and black
grey
Gray
 haired
denizens
Suggestion
Denizens
denizens'
denizen's
 encounter many tough situations in
such
 circumstances.
Therefore
, companies should give a chance to young blood people
beacause
for the reason that; on account of
because
 they are well technology oriented as much as
old
Suggestion
older
 employees To recapitulate, undoubtedly
old
Suggestion
older
 workers have a good experience about their
job
, but companies should not overlook the performance level of senior employees at their
job
. So, retirement after 60 years is not a bad idea.

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