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Do children behave better when they are physically punished or rewarded?

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Children are the future f
or
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of
our society and for the nation as well, some people strongly believe that children should be physically punished for their behaviour while o
ther
any of various alternatives; some other
another
says that rewarding them make them b
etter person.
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better people
a better person
better persons
 According to me
this
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 is a debatable topic and should be scrutinized before making any opinion.
To begin
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 with, there are two ways to teach children about how to behave. One is physical punishment and other is rewarding them. There are several studies have been conducted which shows that children who were rewarded built more self- confidence and performed excellent in their behaviour,
however
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 i
n
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on
the other hand studies has shown that children who were physically punished had l
ack
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a lack
of self-confidence and were always scared of e
very thing
all things
everything
they do because they were not sure about that they will be appreciated or get punished.
However
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, we have
also
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 seen the instances where children who were getting continuous awarded were not listening/ behaving as expected because they were very stubborn for their behaviours. These are the scenario where these kinds of children should be physically punished to realize what is good for them. Studies h
as conducted
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have conducted
to understand that these kinds of children should be treated in both ways to bring them up in their life and to make them realize what is good for them. In conclusion, I can say that reading/ understanding c
hildren
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child
psychology is not easy so and all the scenario must be considered before taking any step on children should be physically punished or rewarded.
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