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Some people say that E- books and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines to what extent do you agree or disagree

#people #e- #books #technology #newspaper #magazines
No doubt that
Technology
 has brought so much of advancement t
o
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in
our life,
however
 newspaper and magazines are are our traditional trends and replacing them will be c
hallenge.
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challenged
challenging
 I
t
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It's
a very good point for d
iscussion but
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discussion, but
it should scrutinize before be p
rovide
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providing
our opinion. Advantages
To begin
 with, E- Books are convenient to carry anywhere and
moreover
 like b
ooks
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the books
we d
o not have bother
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are not bothered
aren't bothered
about storing space because we can save it all in our phone memory, not only
t
his but
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this, but
this
technology
 provide us the ocean of opportunities to get access to e-books and magazines through i
nternet,
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the internet
 which is just a click away. It
also
 helps us in saving m
oney which
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money, which
we spend on books. Disadvantages
On the other hand
,
technology
 has negative impact as well, people are getting used to it; without i
t they
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it, they
find that they have lost, because of i
nternet
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the internet
we are facing lots of health issues as well like insomnia, eyes burning issues etc. We are so much occupied with
this
, where we don’t even realize that who is sitting
next
 to us. So I can say that till some extend we are loosing your relationship. In conclusion,
technology
 has become m
ajor part
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a major part
the major part
of our life and now i
t
it is
it's
not possible to beat the word without
this
, accepted that
technology
 has given access to e-book where you can read anything, a
ny where
at or in or to any place
anywhere
at any point of time,
however
this
 can not be replaced by the feeling which we get while we hold the book or magazine in our and read.
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