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Logging of the rain forests is a serious problem and it may lead to the extinction of animal life and human life. Do you agree or disagree?

#rain #forests #extinction #life
As the world is moving ahead in terms of technological advancements, industries are flourishing in order to make human life easier. More and more investments are made in industries like real estate, pharmaceutics etc. But most importantly, we do only concern about our own lives, and there are more
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 millions of
species
 that exist and their existence is on the line due to human actions. As the world population is increasing day by day,
need
Suggestion
the need
 for more and more land is
arising
advancing or becoming higher or greater in degree or value or status
rising
, and the
last
 resort we have is
forest
. Every week, we hear from the news that forests in Australia are on the fire, sometimes forests in California are on the fire. Without knowing the reason, human beings are putting the
last
 nail in their own coffin. In
forest
 1000 of
species
 live and each and every
species
 are part of the food chain. The only home these animals have is the
forest
 and we are kicking them out and burning them alive, and most animal
species
 are on the verge of extinction due to
this
. We can take the example of Koala Bear, which lives
on
Suggestion
in
 the branches of trees, and
forest
 degradation is turning them into rare
species
. We don't know about Tasmanian Tiger
sit
be agreeable or acceptable to
suit
 was an animal
species
 found in Australia and due to
forest
 logging, their generation came into
end
Suggestion
the end
. These
forest
Suggestion
forests
 are the natural source of oxygen, industrial pollutants that are released
in
Suggestion
into
 the atmosphere, like C02 etc., through the process of photosynthesis, the trees in the
forest
 takes
this
 carbon dioxide and releases oxygen, which is a primary for human survival. So in short,
forest
 is necessary for human survival as well animals, and we are challenging nature by cutting down trees and
as a result
 cutting down our own lives
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