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In recent years the government investing money for development sports facilities. Even though some argue that

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amount should be allocated for school sports centres, Others think that general public and professionals must be benefited from

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of all, the school goers, who require to be trained properly with various sporting activities, because they would be the future sports stars of the country.

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, whatever training and practises they receive at very age have a long lasting positive impacts on them. Since

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, they may not be able to compete with others from different countries. Another point

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can lead serious repercussion to the country’ sporting field. By way of conclusion, while several people consider building sports centres for sports personals and the common people, I, personally, again reaffirm that children be trained with sports facilities, than anyone else.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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