Over the last few decades, there has been an increase in international tourism. Some people think that tourism is beneficial for local communities and should be encouraged. To what extent do you agree or disagree

In the past decades, there has been an
emmensely
to an exceedingly great extent or degree
immensely
rise up when it comes to
tourism industry
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the tourism industry
and
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
may think that it is beneficial to local communities and individuals should be
encourage
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encouraged
too. I totally agree on
this
because if we have more tourists that coming to our country
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
this
will leads to have
more great
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greater
opportunity and leads to economic growth.
To begin
with, having
incresased
made greater in size or amount or degree
increased
in
interntional
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international
International
tourism is getting more
jobs
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job
opportunities within the local communities.
For example
, if more tourists arrived in a community,
this
will lead to the demand of accommodations and food supply.
Then
some businesses like restaurants
,
Accept space
,
hotel, resorts and leisure activities will open and they will need manpower to operate for
this
and
this
the chance of the individuals to showcase their skills.
Next
, with regards to
means
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the means
of transportation nowadays, it's more
covenient
suited to your comfort or purpose or needs
convenient
to travel because of
technology
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technological
advancement.
Futhermore
in addition
Furthermore
, the government will
also
have the responsibility for the security of the tourists as well as the locals. In conclusion
,
Accept space
,
international tourim industry
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the international tourism industry
international tourism industry
is
significanty
in a statistically significant way
significantly
significant
important and beneficial
with
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to
the local
commuties
a group of people living in a particular local area
communities
and every
inviduals
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individual
individuals
individual's
should
encourge
contribute to the progress or growth of
encourage
encouraged
to promote and find ways to improve the tourism industry.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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