You play a team sport with some friends. Last week a member of the team had an accident and wasn’t able to play with you at the weekend. You decide to write to him in hospital, telling him about the match. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, tell him which team won describe the conditions on the day say how you felt about the match
Dear Alex,
I hope now you are doing well and so on your recovery.
I do not think you know about our football game which happened
last
weekend at a central football ground. I do not know how to enlighten this
good news !
As you are aware, we were playing soccer with the Humber college football team which is considered to be the excellent team in our city. Initially
game was tough but in the last
half hour time, we managed to score two back-to-back goals and won the match.
You know that about our city’s weather conditions. Particularly that day was too warm to play. It was a clear sunny sky with a humidity of 78% which was too much. We literally ran out of drinking water.
At starting of the game, I was very nervous as we were playing against the best team but it converted into enjoyment when we won. It was a roller coaster ride with a high heart rate.
I was thinking of letting you know this
in person but your mother told me that you want some rest so I changed my mind.
Get well soon buddy!
Warm regards,
Preet PatelSubmitted by preetpatel2497 on
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coherence cohesion
Your letter is well-organized overall, but some paragraphs can be improved for better flow. Consider smoothing the transition between discussing the match conditions and your feelings about the game.
task achievement
Try to avoid small grammatical errors such as 'I do not think you know' which should be 'I don't think you know' and 'Initially game was tough' which should be 'Initially, the game was tough.' These minor corrections will help improve clarity and readability.
task achievement
Your writing tone is very warm and friendly, which suits the purpose of the letter well. This makes your message more personal and engaging.
coherence cohesion
Each main point is covered clearly and concisely: the team's victory, the match conditions, and your feelings about the game are all addressed effectively.
Structure your letter
A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:
- A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
- The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
- A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)
When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.
All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.