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Planting trees is very important for the environment. Some people say trees should be planted in the vacant areas of cities and town, while others say housing facilitires should be build instead. Do you agree or disagree?

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People have started realizing the importance of trees, and so tree plantation has attracted a lot of environmental activists. While some people claim that it is ideal to convert vacant spaces into residential areas, I personally believe that it is crucial to plant tree saplings in open spaces.
This
 essay will discuss how trees will promote the health of the people, followed by an analysis of why it is not advisable to build houses. There is no doubt in the potential of trees in enhancing human well-being.
Firstly
, industrialisation has lead to an increase in the carbon-di-oxide concentration of
air
. As
this
 can be converted into oxygen by trees, trees can act as an
air
 purifier.
Secondly
, a spot with trees will serve as a recreational area for the inhabitants of the city.
Moreover
, we can prompt our children to play in those natural
environment
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environments
 rather than making them walk through
oppulent
rich and superior in quality
opulent
 malls. Several lines of evidence suggest that inhalation of oxygen rich
air
 aids brain
develpment
act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
development
 in children.
Therefore
, it is advantageous to have a place filled with trees. Now, let us discuss how
conversion
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the conversion
 of barren lands into housing areas can affect our environment negatively. Experts say that buildings would prevent rainwater from entering the soil.
Thus
, it reduces the ground
water
 table. A recent observation has concluded that one of major
concerns
Suggestion
concern
 in
densly
in a stupid manner
densely
 packed residential areas is the
water
scacity
a small and inadequate amount
scarcity
 due to the ground
water
 depletion. To conclude,
although
 building houses in cities
is
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are
a
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an
 important consideration, it is imperative to plant trees as it allows
water
 penetration. It can
also
 serve as a picnic spot for children while supply fresh
air
 for
inhabitants
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the inhabitants
. Perhaps, now is the time to spread the motto of afforestation
instead
 of urbanisation.

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