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Some of today's schools insist that all students have their own laptop computer in class to assist in their education. Do you feel that this would be an advantage to students' education or would it be an unnecessary complication?

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We live in a world where it has become very basic to have
few skills
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a few skills
 handy regardless of what career you choose for yourself. I support the initiative of some schools who have taken
important decision
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the important decision
 to have all their students carry laptops. I think
this
 initiative is not only an excellent
decision but
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decision, but
also
 may prove as a seminal moment for many students in the long run. As kids will learn the usage of laptops from a very early age in the school, it will teach them how to write, how to prepare homework professionally, how to research online etc. If you want to raise the bar of our education, we know that our students must know the use of computers and how to use the resources online to their benefit. Since students will have years of practices with laptops in class, we can be positive that
out
of or belonging to us
our
 graduating students are at the least computer savvy.
Although
 there might be some strong debatable arguments about having personal laptops in class, I think schools can find solutions to those problems. The technical staff at school can make sure that the parental locks on laptops are in place and the teachers can make sure that the students are not getting distracted. Even though accommodating a daily routine of
laptop check
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laptop, check
 and making sure students are not distracted will not be a stroll in the park, the benefit will far overweight for the students.
Hence
 we can agree that the complications are not unnecessary. It is part of the game and we must take them
onboard
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on board
 for a better outcome in
future
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the future
.

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