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Most people accept that we now live in a globalised world but not everyone agrees that this is beneficial. To what extent is globalisation a positive or negative development?

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Globalisation has brought people together. Many people agree that we live in a globalised
world
,
however
, few of them consider it is not beneficial. I completely agree that because of globalisation the humankind will experience positive development.
Firstly
, because of globalisation, there is ease of doing business, markets have opened for new ideas, and more opportunities for everyone. Even though, an area has lack of resources to produce a product, now there is ability generate the product.
For example
, an automobile industry can be built anywhere as its parts can be easily imported from any part of the
world
.
Secondly
, there has been a dip in the monopoly. A brilliant example is, popular fast food joint McDonalds can be seen everywhere in the
world
.
This
also
 shows ease of doing business has increased which has resulted in increased employment.
Finally
, globalisation has made people come together and
work
 together to share the best for the community. An open culture is being introduced to the
world
. Despite different languages and cultures, people are open to
work
 i
n
Suggestion
on
completely different geographical location. In conclusion, we are experiencing open markets and more opportunities to
work
 and learn. Monopoly has reduced due to ease of doing business and people of different culture have come together to
work
 creating and developing a better
world
.

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