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Healthcare
system
in Vietnam is on the way to develop, especially in
drug
Suggestion
the drug distribution system
distribution
system
. At
this
time, there is a lack of
quality
researches about Vietnam
drug
distribution
potential as well as transparent data
system
to monitor
medicine
supply,
demand
and availability. If infectious diseases or neglected tropical diseases spread out in Vietnam, the problem would be more complex and urgent preventive actions would be
consequently
affected. Recently, an outbreak of Dengue fever in Vietnam
has lead
Suggestion
has led
to the shortage of a specific sterile intravenous injection used upon treatment
guildline
a light line that is used in lettering to help align the letters
guidelines
guideline
.
However
,
such
injection is limited all over the world due to few
demand
, and the
tendor
given to sympathy or gentleness or sentimentality
tender
system
in Vietnam is not flexible enough for public hospitals to purchase substitute missing
medicine
.
This
case suggests the
demand
of implementing a better method to prevent and minimize similar problems in the future. For all these reasons, my short term goals
is
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are
to accumulate hands-on experiences in
Vietnam pharmaceutical market
Suggestion
the Vietnam pharmaceutical market
and
then
continue to study for a master’s course in health economics. Through the
network
and knowledge gaining after studying, I will collaborate with experts in health economics, especially in
pharmacy sector
Suggestion
the pharmaceutical sector
pharmaceutical sector
to initiate my project. My ambition is to build a high
quality
and real time
medicine
distribution
data
system
to analyse and develop rapid interventions in response to
medicine
stockouts
or
quality
problems. To be
unbias
characterized by a lack of partiality
unbiased
and transparent in collecting data from many stakeholders in
pharmaceutical market
Suggestion
the pharmaceutical market
, I plan to work in
academic field
Suggestion
the academic field
an academic field
academic fields
and start my project with the sponsor of the government. In the following 2 to 5 years, I would use my
network
to interact with healthcare workforces, technology companies and officers in
Drug
Administration of Vietnam and gather
infomation
a message received and understood
information
as well as feedback to develop the
system
.
This
process will be long due to the complicate
distribution
system
of Vietnam and the mixing of interests between
parties
Suggestion
the parties
. In the long term, I aim at using the
system
to predict the
demand
of
medicine
in specific regions in Vietnam and prevent shortages or
stockouts
in
drug
distribution
. That will
also
impact the
healthcare
Suggestion
health care
system
of Vietnam to become better and
thus
Vietnamese patients can timely access to
quality
and affordable medicines in need. I will
also
connect with other country reporting
systems including
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systems, including
UK’s to share the information of
drug
production and supply chain. As the globalization in
supply chain
Suggestion
the supply chain
of pharmaceuticals
need
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needs
a multinational
cooporation
a business firm whose articles of incorporation have been approved in some state
corporation
corporations
to manage and prevent unexpected issues, my sharing
system
would be a benefit not only to Vietnamese patients but
also
to worldwide citizen. With the support of Chevening scholarship and the Chevening
network
, I would implement my future plan better and have a strong
network
of United Kingdom experts to advise me. I am ready to become a pioneering leader in my field and would definitely contribute to the relationship between Vietnam and the United Kingdom in the future.

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