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Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs. To what extent do you agree?

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Nowadays, because of globalization, a lot of people travel to different
country
. Some people think that visitors should adapt the local practices and customs when
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 to a different culture, but the others think adapting local customs is not necessary. In my opinion, modifying the
country
's manner is necessary because it helps us to integrate with the community and life becomes more convenient and easier.
Firstly
, when tourists adjust a
country
’s
practices
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practice
 will make the people there feel approachable and help them to integrate with the community more easily.
Moreover
, if visitors show respect to the
country
 own manners, local people will accept and welcome them more enthusiastically.
Secondly
, with a
business man
a person engaged in commercial or industrial business (especially an owner or executive)
businessman
 going to another
country
 to develop the company, when meeting the business partners, understanding and accepting their practices will help the meeting more effectively and get better results. If we don’t accept the
country
’s manner, visitors will offend
others
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 people with friendly manners from their
country
with out
in absence of
without
 knowing. Visitors own manners will make local people feel depressed and find
themself
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
 losing self-esteem, so it will be difficult for
tourist
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tourists
a tourist
the tourist
 to ask for direction or for help.
However
, with some people knowing that the tourist is from a popular
country
 or their
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
country
, the local people will find it interesting to learn other
country
’s practices, so not only they welcome those visitors but
also
 want to find out about other countries' culture.
On the other hand
, the budding of different cultures contributes to establishing a multicultural environment, a prerequisite to attract many tourists from all over the world. To
conclusion
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conclude
, adapting a
country
’s customs and practices
is not only easy for tourists but
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has only easy for tourists but also not helped
has only easy for tourists but not also helped
also
 help them to integrate with the community and help them take a visit to another
country
 of contentment.
Therefore
, I agree with the statement that has given.
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