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Some people feel that the legal age at which people can marry should be at least 21. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #age
Marriage is a custom of a society, but different religions have
its
the thing named or in question
it
 on rituals behind
this
. Physically and
metally
in your mind
mentally
 understanding marriage relationship
is act
Suggestion
acts
 as a bedrock of a community, but there is a question
arised
come into existence; take on form or shape
arises
 now, what is the legal age of
marry
the mother of Jesus; Christians refer to her as the Virgin Mary; she is especially honored by Roman Catholics
Mary
?. Some people believe that, it should be more than 21
,
Accept space
,
while others say that, should be 18 or less. I agree with the former one
,
Accept space
,
because of these reasons.
Firstly
, matured couples have a correct vision towards their
life
,
for instance
, they are capable to manage stressful situations in their
life
 in a proper way.
Secondaly
Suggestion
Secondly
,
Accept space
,
people should marry after getting a job
,
Accept space
,
lack of money always creating big hardship in the family
life
,
Accept space
,
without of money
life
 becomes worthless. So prefer to marry after teenage always a perfect decision. On the other face, marry less 18 or in teenage is supported by some
religios
concerned with sacred matters or religion or the church
religious
 people in our world, but
its
it is
it's
 a cruel thing towards the children.Because of childhood is a period of freedom, if they marry that time never lead a successful
life
.
Then
 jobless nature is another crucial factor, most of them are depends their parents for even a minute
things
Suggestion
thing
, sometimes
this
also create
Suggestion
also creates
has also created
is also creating
 many problems in their
life
. To put into a nutshell, for the better aspect of
life
 the legal age of matrimony should be
afte
Suggestion
over
after
 21.

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  • Legal age
  • Marriage
  • Maturity
  • Stability
  • Individual choice
  • Freedom
  • Cultural practices
  • Religious practices
  • Education
  • Career aspirations
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