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The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The health
 of an individual is largely dependent on himself and his surroundings. There is an increasing concern about the
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 down-fall of a persons health in the years to come. I tend to agree with the aforementioned statement with few views disagreeing
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with
 it. Health is a subject of utmost importance in the fast paced
life
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 we are leading. With the growing sedentary lifestyle and increased amounts of stress, it is true that in a few years people would live for a far less duration. Stress is one of the leading causes of heart
conditions
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conditions, thus
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, decreasing
life
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 expectancy. Increasing pollution and the damage we cause to mother nature calls for a payback and would drastically affect the health of an individual in the times to come. A recent research proves that depleting ground water levels are going to result in draught within the
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 five decades.
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, widespread development in the field of medicine cab curb disease resulting in improving the quality of
life
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. Increase in vaccinations and cures can help the population sustain a healthier
life
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. Despite, of the development in the medical fraternity To conclude, we have already caused tremendous ill effects to nature and ourselves. Medical facilities can hope to provide a change
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in
 the
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future, even
 if we decide and take drastic measures to make changes in our lifestyle and habits.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Standard of health
  • 2. Average
  • 3. Lower
  • 4. Future
  • 5. Aging population
  • 6. Chronic diseases
  • 7. Sedentary lifestyle
  • 8. Lack of exercise
  • 9. Poor dietary habits
  • 10. Environmental pollution
  • 11. Technological advancements
  • 12. Impact on health
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