in some countries, children under 16 are not allowed to leave school by law and get full-time work. Is this a good or bad thing?

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These days, in certain countries, child labour is
a
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an
international concern as it destroys the present and the future of the child as well as the nation. In many nations,
kinders
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are strictly
probihited
excluded from use or mention
prohibited
to do
work
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before high school education.
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this
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This
is a
best
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good
better
step against child
labour whereas
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labour, whereas
children will
concentrates
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concentrate
on their studies.
to
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To
commerce with, when youngsters are not permitted to do
work
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,
then
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they improve their skills and knowledge which helps them to
acheive
to gain with effort
achieve
their goal in life. Working in growth age
create
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creates
obstracles
something immaterial that stands in the way and must be circumvented or surmounted
obstacles
to sharp their skills.
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for
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For
instance, teenager works full
time
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time, then
then
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they
are not concentrate
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are not concentrating
are not concentrated
don't concentrate
do not concentrate
have not concentrated
on their
study
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studies
because of stress from
work
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.
if
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If
these children were not allowed to
work
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then
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they would able to do
study
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a study
the study
in
graceful and efficient manner
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a graceful and efficient manner

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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