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Some people think money is the best gift to give to teenagers others disagree to this. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is often thought by some people that the best present to offer youngsters is cash, in my
opinion I
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opinion, I
 think there are other souvenirs
such
 as bags, shoes and other items that can be given as rewards. On the one hand, while some people argued that the most appropriate gift for adolescents is
money
 and I agree
this
 is because sometimes, the individuals involved may come from
such
 a poverty stricken background that they truly need the currency for survival.
As a result
, basic needs are met and
such
 teens are happy. To illustrate
this
, there was a young child in my street who needed
money
 to pay her school fees, the church helped her with some cash every semester and now she is a graduate.
On the other hand
, even though it is argued by some people that
money
 is the most excellent gift that can be offered to teenagers, I believe that other
items
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items, such
such
 as bags, shoes or beautiful dresses could be the best depending on the situation. More often than not, there is no amount of
money
 that can be given to children from
very rich background
Suggestion
a very rich background
 that they will
appreciate but
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appreciate, but
 sometimes a beautiful present
such
 as nice bags, shoes or dresses may come in handy.
In addition
, given
money
 to teenagers may make them do what they are not supposed to do
for instance
, when given cash, a young boy can get into drugs and alcohols. In conclusion, even though some are of the opinion that hard currency is the most suitable reward to be presented to young adults, I think other souvenirs
such
 as nice bags and wrist watch may be preferred by some teens.

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