Some people think history has nothing or little to tell us, but others think that studying the past history can help us better understand the present. Please discuss the two views and give your own opinion.

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A group of

people

believe that knowing about past

history

does not have any benefit for us;

while

another group think learning

history

guides us to know about now. in my own opinion

history

is our light of way about our home which is the Earth planet. Not knowing about

history

creates some problems for everyone in the world. When

people

or society do not know about the

history

of the accidents that had happened in the past it would cause problems which are going to show in the future and

also

do not have any information about the lifestyle of

people

who had been living in the past could force

people

to go on the wrong way.

For example

, if

people

did not know about the wars that have been done and

also

the mistakes that kings made in the past, they must go that

ways

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twice

and make

this

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a lot of

people

. Knowing about

history

can light our way and

also

help us improve our knowledge about the present and

also

future. When

people

know about the past can solve many problems that are not going to happen again for more, and guide everybody about different cultures It is necessary to know how

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to behave with them.

For example

, governments that want to cooperate together must understand the laws of each other countries

also

knowing about the past of the countries that want to communicate with each other is so helpful because shows them the things that might make their relationship worse or even better. In conclusion, I believe that

history

is valuable and by learning humans can use the experiences which had a lot of cost in past.

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Some people think history has nothing or little to tell us, but others think that studying the past history can help us better understand the present. Please discuss the two views and give your own opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

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