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It is becoming increasingly expensive for museums to be open to the public. What would be the best solution to keep them open, in your opinion?

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Museums
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 are the vital source
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 information when it comes to history. Even though it is a kind of resource for both students and
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society, these
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 to exhibit to the common people. In my opinion, I think
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 problem can be tackled by getting donations and charging entry fees.
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these challenges can be resolved. One possible solution is charging fees
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 visitors.
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 means those who want to visit any museum,
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should pay a fixed amount of entry fees. Having collected charges from
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, the amount can be channelized for the maintenance and proper functioning of these institutes; gradually, the excess amount can be used
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 access for the general public to these places.
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,
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 offers not only
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financial assistance to the government, but the public would be able to satisfy their curiosity. Most of the visitors would show, eventually, respect towards the exhibits,
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 of taking
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 granted Another obvious method to tackle the issues is
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requesting donations from the rich. There are many people, who are interested in developing their
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 heritage and cultural system;
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, they would
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 to contribute financially to ensure
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public access to
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. At the same time, it is the
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 responsibility to utilise the assistance in an effective manner, rather than wasting it.
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, privatization of
museums
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 would be another possibility.
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, in some
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 of India,
museums
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 are privatized as the state lacks funds to maintain
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 parts of the world and most of them are successful. By way of conclusion, by taking appropriate actions, the common people in the society get an opportunity to experience the
museums
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. It is vital that these structures be visited by members of the society to get a better understanding of their historical background.

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Consider clearly defining your main points and ensuring each paragraph focuses on a single idea.
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Introduce your examples more clearly to illustrate your points effectively.
grammar
Revise sentence structures to improve clarity and grammar.
task achievement
You have presented a clear opinion on the issue and proposed solutions, which reflects a good understanding of the topic.
coherence
The structure of your essay is logical, with clear paragraphs dedicated to different solutions.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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