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You have an extended family and every year you all get together to go on a family trip for a week. Your uncle is in charge of the plans this year and you would like to suggest a place you have visited lately. Write a letter to your uncle. In your letter: suggest the place you recommend describe your experience in this place mention what you could do there

#year #get #trip #week #uncle #charge #plans #place
Dear uncle I hope you and
aunt
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your aunt
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 are in radiant health and doing well. I am writing
this
 letter as a reminder to you that you are the
incharge
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in charge
 of
this
 year family trip arrangements. I hope
this
 year we will have remarkable holidays. I would like to suggest
you
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that we could plan our trip to some hill station in India. There are many areas which have picturesque views and amazing activities to enjoy
enjoy
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. I want you to search about Kullu Manali Himachal Pradesh, it is
also
 known as
hub
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the hub
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 of
the
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India.
This
 is
carbon free
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 so it would be very beneficial
relax
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to relax
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 our body and mind, far away from pollution. There are many activities which,we can do to make a call to more enthralled
such
 as hiking, paragliding, river rafting under the proper guidance. I believe, it will be a wonderful destination. As you know I am really fond of
handicraft
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handicrafts
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 and artefacts. I would shop
lot
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 of antique pieces as there are many craft shops. I hope you would like my suggestions. I am really excited to meet you all. With regards, john smith

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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