ordinary people try to copy famous people either reading magazine or watching tv,why do they do this?do you think its good idea to copy famous people?

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trend
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trending
that
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many common people seek to imitate the
celeberities
a widely known person
celebrities
after they read about them through
magazine
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a magazine
the magazine
magazines
or
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the act of observing; taking a patient look
watching
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TV
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reasons
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a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
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believe that, it is not a healthy practice for ordinary people to copy the famous people in their
life
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denotes a person or thing
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of
celeberities
a widely known person
celebrities
are
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is
always attractive. Many people want the same
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life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
and enjoyment in their
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. Some people think that they would gain same attraction
amoung
in the middle of
among
their friends and societies if they follow their role model.
some
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people believe that if
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people in general
they
copy the famous
persanalities they
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personalities, they
personalities they
would achieve the same success and wealth in their
life
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copying
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Copying
the famous
persanities
the complex of all the attributes--behavioral, temperamental, emotional and mental--that characterize a unique individual
personalities
might get temporary happiness to
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them, but
they
may lost
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may lose
their
originalites
someone who creates new things
originators
originalities
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when
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a person
live
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lives
is living
has lived
in his/her way boost his confidence and self esteem.
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, the
celeberities
a widely known person
celebrities
spent
enormous amount
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an enormous amount
of money to maintain their beauty and
life
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status.
it
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It
is not possible for a common man to follow.
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, many young people spent
substancial amount
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a substantial amount
substantial amount
of their income to buy the product which is being used by their role model.
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this
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attitude may affect their economical status and might divert their responsibilities in their family .To sum up, a person should explore his/her personalities rather than trying to copy others in their
life
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which
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Which
will improve the confidence and self esteem and help them to achieve greater
succeess
an event that accomplishes its intended purpose
success
in their
life
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