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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

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With the invent of the Internet, the lifestyle of people has changed drastically. With the introduction of social media sites, people get used to those, and heavy
usage
 has been observed. I think the
usage
 of social media impact once life in a negative way. Undoubtedly, social networking sites are top-rated among young and older adults. They are using those sites to stay updated and to communicate with their relatives and friends by sharing pictures and videos or chatting with them.
For instance
, by subscribing to new
Facebook
 groups, they can find more friends who have similar thoughts and life patterns which assists them in many ways. An excellent
Facebook
 group will share knowledgeable subject matter which assists others.
Nevertheless
, with the introduction of
Facebook
, Instagram and YouTube, many people are using it for many illegal activities
such
 as organising parties which offer drugs and provide bad influence through closed groups. Recently, in Negambo, there was a successful raid of
such
 party, and the police captured around one hundred youngsters with illegal drugs. It is observed that the younger generation is always in search of
such
 parties.
Furthermore
, addiction to social networking sites is increasing rapidly, and
as a result
, people are losing time, which can be used for some other productive activity. The craving desire to browse through news feeds and the posts from others has increased dramatically, and
as a result
, most of the IT companies have banded
usage
 of social media
such
 as
Facebook
, Twitter during the office hours to improve the productivity of the workforce. In conclusion, the
usage
 of social media has immensely impacted negatively, and as a consequence, people get into trouble and lose time affecting productivity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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