Modern children are suffering from the diseases that were once considered to be meant for adults only. Obesity is a major disease prevalent among children. What are its causes and what solutions can be offered?
Nowadays, diseases which were once connected to adulthood are now suffered by millennials. One of most common
illness
is obesity witnessed in children today. Use synonyms
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causes including
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obseity
are more physical activity and healthy eating habits.
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obesity
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illness
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an illness
illnesses
early
only prone to older people. Suggestion
earlier
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food
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such
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related to older people.
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food
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physcial
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