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Throughout history, people dream to live in a perfect society while they haven't agreed how the ideal society would be like. What is the most important element you think to make the perfect society? How do people do to achieve an ideal society?

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An ideal society has always been a dream of any individual in the course of history. For many countries, a rich and powerful community is worth pursuing while others believe a place having a high human’s satisfactory number is what they have been looking for. In my opinion, a perfect world must be able to meet not only basic but
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 limitless needs of each individual.
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, a dream community must allow fulfilling all human requirements of mutual peace, education, health, and food supply. Failing to achieve one of these elements results in an unhealthy and unbalanced life. North Korea,
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, cannot claim itself a perfect country.
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 the government has spent millions of dollars on building a strong and impressive army with high-tech weapons, their people still have to live in poverty and illiteracy.
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, the ideal place should guarantee one’s spiritual life, which includes an interest in entertainment, lifelong development, and employability. Achieving
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 a society requires the effort of both the government and the people worldwide. Governments should enforce laws on protecting those requirements. At the same time, it is the public to join hands to help those living in difficult circumstances expose to basic must-haves and later, happiness.
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, it is high time we cared more about the environment and looked for sustainable development. Some actions to carry out are reducing plastic bags, reusing and reducing. More trees ought to be planted and more campaigns should be launched to raise public awareness. In conclusion,
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 a perfect world varied within each of us, I strongly hold that we opt for a place that can fulfil the material and spiritual needs of individuals and the public.
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 a dream asks for the participants in the building process of everyone in the long term.

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