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Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph depicts the fact of worker's or
employee
's taking different modes of transport to commute between home to
work
 in the year 2009.Comparing the data with London workers separately creates a distinct visualisation for the user to analyse the fact of daily office commute of different
work
 group. London is one of the busiest cities as we depicts from the graph with 15% of the people are taking over an hour of travel
time
 to reach to their
work
place
.With only close to 18% of the workers are taking less than 15mins.
Further
 drilling down, we are about to deduce that workers are leaving in farther areas from
work
 locations.Other parts of the UK the
work
place
 are either equally distributed over the cities or
employee
 are finding cheaper rate houses nearer to their
work
place
.Being expensive in London, workers prefer to stay a little farther from the
work
place
. Mode of commute generally
employee
's prefers a
car
, might be the reason for a higher travel
time
 in London as 35% of the
employee
 prefer to commute by
car
.Most minimal is by bicycle, only 2% of them prefer.If we try to lessen the percentage the
car
 used by workers & allow them to use public transports like bus, train and underground,
then
 there is a high potential of reducing of commute
time
 in London, whereas in the rest parts of the UK most
that is
 79% prefer a
car
, but due to lower rates and equal distribution of
work
 office location around the cities making it a suitable
place
 to live in. Concluding with the fact the most of them prefer their own transport to commute between
work
 and office, which make it difficult in London to reduce the traffic
time
, but cheaper house accommodation and distributed
work
 location can make life easier in London.

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