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Increases in the production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. Why is this the case? What can be done to solve this problem?

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There are various reasons of how the nature is destroyed by the increasing of production and what people should do to address these problems.
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 essay will discuss about why
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environment
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the environment
 is damaged by escalating consumer-goods production and some measurements to tackle the issue. Two of the major threats to the natural
environment
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 are air pollution and waste. Gas emission from more factories and exhaust fumes from vehicles, which are used
on
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in
 the logistic steps
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for
in
 producing process, lead to global
warming
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warming, then
warming than
warming than than
then
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 might
results
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result
 in a devastating effect on the planet in the future. As consumption increases, which partially stems from the increase in human population, we
are producing
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have produced
 ever-greater quantities of waste, which would contaminate the earth and pollute rivers as well as oceans. The government should impose taxes, so-called green taxes, to limit the emission released to the
environment
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 or to control the quality of the emission before it is exposed to the air. They
also
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 can force the manufacturers to switch to renewable energy using solar, wind or water power. Together with that, individual should
also
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 take their responsibility for the impact they have on the
environment
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.
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, they should choose products with less packaging or recycle as much as possible. By using used goods and keep
recylcing
the act of processing used or abandoned materials for use in creating new products
recycling
 as much as possible, less waste would be expected. In conclusion, there are different reasons for the natural
environment
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 to be suffered when production of consumer goods increases, and both governments and individuals can play their part
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in
 easing the problem to look after the
environment
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