Governments should spend money to encourage the development of sport and art for school students rather than supporting professional sports and art performances for the public. Do you agree or disagree?

In the modern era sports and art activities play
important role
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an important role
in the society. It is beneficial for children's development. Government should huge amount spend on
creativity
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creating
more than professional sports for the citizens. There are many benefits for children to
playing
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play
sports in the school.
firstly
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Firstly
,
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children gain knowledge about games and they can play
.
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secondly students
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Secondly, students
Secondly students
as fit as a fiddle for health.
Therefore some
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Therefore, some
children show interest their sports like as volleyball and badminton so on.By
this
plural of "this"
these
children get
achievement
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an achievement
in
sports field
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the sports field
.
However
,
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,
some
people
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peoples
person's
peoples'
hobbies to do arts performance.A number
ofarts
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of arts
like as painting
,
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,
singing
,
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,
cooking
,
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,
artists on.
people
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People
do arts for buy money and gain name and fame in the nation.By
this
,
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,
they can show their talent in exhibitions and competitions.
This
creativities are better opportunities of students for
future
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the future
.
On the other hand
,
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,
professional sports like as cricket and
kabaddi
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Kabaddi
is an international game playing in the country.But some people do not participate in
this games
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this game
these games
because they do not chance to
playing
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play
games.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
that's why
authorities
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the authorities
should large amount spend on national level sports
instead
the
professionals
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professional
sports.
therefore
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Therefore
,
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,
many sports activities are developed in the school.Teachers always encourage to students for play different games. By
this
,
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,
children gain confidence
.
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.
Moreover
, they get success in their life and they are known for famous celebrity in any field.To conclude
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after analysing all the
aspects both
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aspects, both
are important in our life
.
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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