the pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year,2016.

the pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year,2016.
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The pie charts compare the
proportion
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of incomes and
expenditures
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for an American charity in 2016. It is noticeable that
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dramatic differences are not seen when we compare the figures for
revenue
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and costs in terms of
total
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money. Donated food received by far the highest
proportion
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of the
revenue
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sources.
On the other hand
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, program services made up the largest amount of
expenditures
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. Looking at the information in more detail, we can see that donated food is
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the top of charity’s income sources with 86.6%.
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earning sectors followed by community contributions and program
revenue
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with only 10.4% and 2.2% respectively.
By contrast
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, the same
proportion
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of
revenue
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(0.2%) is earned by government grants and investment income. In the
expenditures
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chart, program services account for the vast majority of consumption with 95.8%. The costs of fundraising
welcomed
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by 2.6% as the
second
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sector of
expenditures
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.
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, the lowest
proportion
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of
utilaztion
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utilization
was management and general, with only 1.6%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, expenditures, revenue with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • donations
  • grants
  • fundraising events
  • expenditure
  • administration costs
  • program expenses
  • direct benefits
  • indirect benefits
  • underprivileged children
  • education
  • healthcare
  • shelter
  • nourishment
  • medical treatments
  • basic needs
  • financial sustainability
  • transparency
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