Some people think that dangerous sport should be banned while others believe that people should be free to choose.Discuss both views and give your opinion
Some think that dangerous sporting
activities
should be legalized, whilst others say it should be a personal choice. Although
extreme sports
might have some negative impacts on health, I believe it should leave on the people
with proper rules and regulations.
On the one hand, hazardous sports
like Bungee Jumping, Scuba Diving, Rock
Climbing may cause injury and the effect could be debilitating. Correct word choice
and Rock
People
hurt themselves by breaking their shoulder
, bone marrow, hands and legs Fix the agreement mistake
shoulders
while
participating such
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in such
activities
. There was a survey of New York State hospital's
emergency department for injured Capitalize word
Hospital's
people
and in most cases
the reason for the injury is reckless motor racing in a friendly or competitive Add a comma
cases,
environments
. Correct the article-noun agreement
environment
However
, due to
this
health issue, it is not justified to ban these sports
because the forbidden fruits are always sweeter and people
will join in the hidden places.
On the other hand
, dangerous sports
are fun and recreational activities
for some people
and it reduces their boredom. Sometimes individuals realize the value of life when they are at the edge of it. For example
, American
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the American
air driving centre
asked the reason on their application form to their participants and most of them answered that it is for fun and they get energized by doing Correct your spelling
Air Driving Centre
such
things. I believe,
it is best for everyone to make some legal rules and give power to some organizations for training and certify the sporting centres and monitor their Remove the comma
apply
activities
.
In conclusion, while
banning life taking
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life-taking
sports
will create underground events, it is better to make it legal using proper regulations because people
love to do such
thing
for fun and Fix the agreement mistake
things
test
their abilities. It is recommended that in the future governments will create Fix the infinitive
to test
law
for Fix the agreement mistake
laws
the
extremely dangerous Correct article usage
apply
sports
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