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Some believe that modern technology is increasing the gap between rich and poor people, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Since the Internet bubble during the late 1990s, the world has entered the era of unprecedented technological advancement, leading to the mounting debate on the gulf between the affluent and the impoverished.
Although
 the role of
technology
 in alleviating the hardship of poor people is undeniable, I am inclined toward the view that it has been, concurrently, widening the income inequality. Advocates of
tec
hnology of
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the technology
ten argue that
such
 development has improved the living conditions of the needy at a significantly fas
t pa
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faster
ce. Admittedly, technological products and services are becoming ever cheaper, so now even those earning a low income can possess mobile devices and,
consequently
, have access to the Internet. With many free courses offered online cov
ering a
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covers
wide range of topics of academic and practical knowledge, they can gain an alternative education without attending school and paying fees, which they may be unable to afford.
Besides
 the all-important access to education, newly developed
technology
 can aid inh
abitants of
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the inhabitants
 remote, deprived areas to have clean water, improve farming techniques and enjoy sustainable energy,
such
 as hyd
ropower an
d solar energy. Notwithstanding the strengths of modern
technology
 in helping people escape poverty, I believe that it has
also
 been, simultaneously, expanding the inequality gap. When
tec
hnology de
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the technology
velops, it has been rep
lacing ma
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replaced
ny jobs heretofore reserved for the middle- and low-income workers with robots and artificial intelligence, thereby increasing the level of unemployment, as seen in Southern Europe recently, and social unrest.
Furthermore
,
technology
-driven economies usually favour a small group of successful individuals by amplifying their talent and luck.
Therefore
, while development is occurring and the total incomes of
such
 countries are growing, high-tech entrepreneurs,
such
 as the founders of great companies like Facebook, Google or Alibaba, are seen to profit disproportionately compared with the remainder. In conclusion, I am for the idea that modern developments in
technology
, albeit beneficial to low-income people, have given the rich a far greater boost, which exacerbates the wealth disparity issue.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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