the bar chart shows the degree of worry of people about various problems. Write an essay identifying the key points.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of different
problems
.
Overall
, most of
Change preposition
apply
people
Add an article
the people
concerned
about global Add a missing verb
are concerned
problems
and their negative impact on the environment. Accorting
to the data, the most serious Correct your spelling
According
problems
for respondents are chemicals put into Add an article
the river
river
and the sea and getting rid of nuclear waste (more than 57%). On the other side, the fewest number of people worried about Fix the agreement mistake
rivers
problems
such
as noize
from traffic ugly new buildings and lack of Correct your spelling
noise
acces
to open spaces (less than 18%). Correct your spelling
access
Also
, problems
with insepticides
, dirty beaches and bathing water, Correct your spelling
insecticides
destruction
of wildlife have equal Correct word choice
and destruction
persantage
(40%). Correct your spelling
percentage
Correct your spelling
Furthermore
Futhermore
, oil slicks from ships, fumes and smoke from factoriesCorrect your spelling
Furthermore
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