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Many people today use their phones to communicate by sending text messages than talking. What are the reasons for this? Does it have advantages and disadvantages

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Modern technology has made life easier by giving better and efficient
way
 of
communication
 in the form of mobile phones, and particularly with the usage of text messages. One can convey one's message by consuming less
time
 and resources and
this
 is
reason
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the reason
 for its popularity among masses. In my point of view, it has advantages as well as
disadvantages but
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disadvantages, but
 balance is the key to keep things right. Now a day’s life is
running fast and to
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running fast and
 cope up with its speed everyone has to move briskly.
Firstly
, mostly people use
method
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a method
the method
 of texting to convey their thoughts because it is less
time
 consuming and can convey
message
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messages
 at any
time
 without any hindrance. Another important thing is its cost effectiveness every mobile phone service provider gives
lot
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lots
 of free messages as
compare
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comparable
comparatively
 to voice calls.
Recent survey
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A recent survey
Recent surveys
 of university students reveals that 70 percent of students prefer to do
communication
 by using
messaging
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message
 apps like Whatsapp and Facebook messenger. The biggest disadvantage of doing rigorous messaging is cut down of real verbal
communication
.
This
 has a negative effect on real life relationships. Most of the
time
 messages can be interpreted differently and cause
rift
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rifts
 among loved ones.
Thus
, in
this
way
 messaging effect relationships negatively. In conclusion, it is right to say that messaging has revolutionized the
way
 of
communication
 by conveying things efficiently and cost effectively, but on the other side total dependence on it may affect the relationships in
negative
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a negative way
negative ways
way
. People should use
this
 technology in a balance and appropriate
way
.
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