Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarket in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Since the advent of 20th century, we have seen a number of prominent supermarket brands dominating the retail market. With the expansion of

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brands to tier-1 and tier-2 cities many people believe that, it can lead to the closure of many local

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' and, ultimately lead to the end of local communities. I agree with

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argument, and in

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essay I will put forth my views with supporting examples. There are a lot of people who believe that, large supermarkets can increase

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in a region, and

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will mean consumers will have a better choice of products at reasonable rates.

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is because big supermarket brands buy products in bulk from the suppliers and play the volume game, unlike the local mom and pop stores. Due to

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reason they are able to keep the price low and pass on the benefits to the customer.

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, it has been estimated that, Walmart buys close to 200 tonnes of diary products each year,

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large volume purchase helps them keep the prices at least 20% lower than their local

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, it is a well know fact that, with the entry of large volume retail players like Walmart many of the small

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in local communities are not able to compete and going bankrupt.

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is because, some of these mom and pop stores cannot bring down the margins on products like their

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, since it will affect their

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, based on the research conducted by a leading consulting firm it's been found that once Walmart starts operation in a town, 50% of the local

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close down in the region within one year.

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closures have an adverse effect on local communities in terms of loss of livelihood and jobs To sum up, I believe, local players in smaller markets will not be able to sustain the

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from larger players, and

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ultimately lead to destruction of local communities.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

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Topic Vocabulary:

economic benefits
community identity
personalized customer service
strong relationships
wide variety of goods
lower prices
community spirit
local events
sponsorships
cultural heritage
homogenize
logistics
carbon footprint
inequality
low-income individuals

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