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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in the scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared openly. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Some individuals are of the view that it is important to share all sorts of
information
 to contribute towards scientific research,
business
 and education.
However
,
on the
contrary some
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contrary, some
 people believe that important and valuable
information
 should not be shared openly. In my
opnionopinion
,
iI
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 think valuable
information
 should not be shared with everyone as it may have a negative impact on an individual or
business
. Technology nowadays has empowered everyone to
access
information
 around the globe. Some individuals believe that giving
access
 to valuable
information
 will contribute to scientific research. It will
also
 help the
business
 community to develop strategies to understand current trends. Students having
access
 to
information
 will help them understand any particular subject better.
For example
, students pursuing higher education will have
access
 to articles without any cost which may assist them in writing their dissertation
.
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.
On the other hand
, sharing valuable
information
 openly may have negative consequences for individuals or businesses. Any
information
 which has
great amount
Suggestion
a great amount
 of value should not be available for free to individuals or entities. If a
business
 or an individual plans to carry out research and requires valuable
information
, it should be accessed by paying a price.
For instance
, Tesco, a leading massive retail store in the UK, records and maintains data
of
Suggestion
on
about
 how consumers shop and behave in their stores. These insights are very valuable to other companies producing goods who want to understand consumer
behaviourbehavior
.
Therefore
, Tesco sells
this
information
 to other companies so they can design and cater to changing consumer needs and wants
.
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.
 To conclude, sharing
information
 is beneficial but I believe that it should not be openly available as it leads towards a negative development for any individual or entity
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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