The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
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The three pie charts illustrate the average proportion of three various nutrients, namely
sodium
, saturated fat and added
sugar
, in four different meals in the USA. If these types of nutrients
be
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 overeaten, they can lead to
healthy
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problems.
Overall
, it can be seen that
the
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large amount of
sodium
and saturated fat
consumed
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in
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at
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dinner
.
Also
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the highest percentage of
consumption
of added
sugar
is related to
snacks
. The first chart (
Sodium
) shows
the
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equal percentages of
sodium
(14%) consumed in
snacks
and breakfast,
while
dinner
stood the first rank with 48%. Approximately a
third
of
sodium
ate in lunch. Looking at the
second
Chart (Saturated fat),
it is clear that
37% and 26% of
this
nutrient
consumed
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in
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dinner
and lunch respectively.
Snacks
and breakfast are responsible for
consumption
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the consumption
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of 21% and 16% of saturated fat in turn. The
last
chart illustrates the
consumption
of added
sugar
in which
snacks
(42%) and
dinner
(just under a
third
) ranked
the
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first and
the
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second
in turn in terms of
consumption
of extra
sugar
.19% of added
sugar
consumed
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in lunch, followed by breakfast with 16%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "second, third".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, sugar, dinner, consumption, snacks with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "illustrate" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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