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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement ? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

#country #language #reason
Living in a foreign
country
 is both an interesting and challenging experience. I do agree that serious social and practical problems are very likely to occur,
however
, they can totally be avoided if we try to learn and respect each other's
country
cultures
Suggestion
culture
. On the one hand, there are several difficulties when living in a foreign
country
. The social problem most people have to face is the
language
 barrier, which means a person
can not
can not
cannot
 understand or speak the
language
 of the
country
 he lives in. The lack of understanding without verbal communication is quite troublesome as it may lead to
miscomprehension
 or confusions.
Furthermore
, in some cases, due to cultural difference, one can accidentally offend the locals with inappropriate
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 and word and
therefore
 makes things complicated.
For instance
, the French often greet others by kissing on both cheeks while in some Asian countries
this
 kind of action may be impolite or even considered sexual harassment. For practical issue, it would be about finding a job. It is hard to find a well-paid job because many companies put the priority of hiring the native over the immigrant, and it is harder if the person is not fluent in the local
language
.
On the other hand
, those disadvantages mentioned above might not be as serious as we think. The
first
 reason is that the difference in
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 is understandable and can be forgiven by the native. The
second
is one
Accept comma addition
is, one
 should do research and learn about the culture and customs of his living-in
country
Suggestion
the country
 to prevent misunderstandings. If the person is open-minded and tolerant enough, the challenges of accommodating in a foreign
country
 will be solved little by little. To summarize, I partially agree that an individual's life can be affected by social and practical problems if living abroad that differs in
language
, but most problems are not unnecessarily severe should he had fully prepared.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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