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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.

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Children learn from whatever they see around the world and
also
 try to copy it. Some group of people thinks that it is the responsibility of parents to teach children how to be a good member of society.
However
, others think that teachers should teach
this
. The essay will describe who is responsible for teaching children to be a good person of society. There are multifarious reasons behind teaching these type of values by parents. The prime reason, why parents should teach children is for unconditional love between them. To simplify
this
, most of the
time
 children spend with their parents so an unconditional love is created between them so that children obey their parents.
For instance
, from born of a
child
, he or she is cured by his or her parents so a 5 years old
child
 will definitely obey whatever their parents ask to do. Another most significant reason, children do whatever their parents do. Stemming from
this
, whether good or bad things done by parents, it will be followed by children. To illustrate, if parents have a bad habit of shouting to anyone without any reason which is seen by their children,
then
 children will
also
 get affected to
this
 bad habit and if parents do good behaviour in front of others,
then
 it will be followed by their children.
In contrast
, why teachers have the responsibility to teach about values to children is for sufficient
time
. To simplify
this
, nowadays parents do not spend their most of
time
 with their children because of work.
For example
, in many metropolises, both mother and father are working and they do not allocate sufficient
time
 to their
child
 and put them in the hostel. So that school is the only place left for children to learn about values.
Furthermore
, teachers can identify the
child
's good and bad manner and
also
 can improve them while teaching. Agglomerating all these points elaborated above, it can be concluded that,
however
 teacher has responsibility to teach a
child
 but the most responsible for it is the parents of the
child
 itself.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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