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some people believe that it is best best to accept a bad situation , such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

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Occupation and
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life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
 matters in a different manner to each individual. Some argue that unfortunate circumstances like having less
money
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 and
unfavorable
not encouraging or approving or pleasing
unfavourable
work
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 place should be accepted, while others prefer that
one
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 should always try for some improvement in
such
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 type of situations.
This
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 essay will discuss both views,
however
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, I opine that better living standard and a good
job
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 matters. It is a common believe in some people that bad conditions like mundane
job
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 and shortfall in
money
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 should be accepted. They prefer other things over
work
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 place and wealth
such
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 as
few
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fewer
 working hours and family time.
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, people having
such
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 believe
also
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 have
fate
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a fate
 that good things will gradually come out of bad situations.
For instance
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, my uncle was
government employee
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a government employee
 throughout his
life
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 and had few working hours and less income. But soon after his
retirement he
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retirement, he
 was given a lot of benefits and pension for his rest of
life
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. These are the reasons why bad circumstances are
sometime
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
 accepted by
general population
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the general population
. Fundamentally, it’s important for every individual to
work
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 hard and try to improve the living standard in order to have a sumptuous
life
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. A person should seek a
job
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 which is
of
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in
 his interest;
in addition
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 to that
job
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 satisfaction and good income are both mandatory because without having
interest
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an interest
 in
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job
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the job
 and shortage of
money
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one
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 cannot have peace of mind.
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, everyone has some desires and objectives which cannot be achieved without having enough
money
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.
For example
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, a friend of mine shifted a couple of jobs because of not only being paid
enough but
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enough, but
also
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 his designation was not according to his specialization. Later on, he did masters and now he is working in a multinational company according to his field with respectful package and friendly environment.
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 is
one
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 should always be determined and
work
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 hard to achieve his aim and improve his situation. In conclusion,
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work place
a place where work is done
workplace
 satisfaction and income matter to some individual while
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 believe that
one
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 should accept all the bad situations
such
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 as
bad
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a bad job
job
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 and shortage of
money
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. In my opinion, I believe in the other way that struggle and hard
work
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always pays
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always pay
 off and
one
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 should try to improve the circumstances.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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