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More and more people are opting for ready-made food instead of freshly cooked food. Do this development has more advantages over disadvantages?

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It’s becoming an increasing trend for people to consume ready-made meals rather than home cooked
food
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. I believe that the demerits of
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 outweigh the merits, which include easy access to
food
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 and reduced stress of cooking. Admittedly, there are numerous pros associated with getting readily-prepared foods, which include; reduced stress of having to make meals after a hectic and strenuous workday.
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 is due to the fact that, humans by nature spend too much of gruesome hours working and making a living for themselves,
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, are left with less time for other chores of life.
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, an average Lagos-based adult spends up to five hours of the day in traffic,
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 to the statutory eight hours of work.
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 leaves not enough time for cooking and leads to them grabbing any available fast
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, while there are perks to getting fast meals, the effects from
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, are quite injurious and negatively impart the health of individuals.
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, studies conducted by the World Health Organization clearly indicated the relationship between consumption of fast foods and high rate cardiovascular diseases. Independent studies have
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 linked high rate of obesity in adults to increased consumption of fatty meals, mostly ready-made foods.
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, the positive effects of consuming home and freshly prepared cuisines can never be overemphasized, as their benefits transcend the impeccable taste derived from them and the satisfaction of making your own
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. In conclusion, while there are many advantages
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 eating fast meals, the disadvantages, which include, increased cardiovascular diseases and obesity associated with the high fat content obviously outweigh their merits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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