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Smokers can cause themselves serious health problems. The choice to smoke is made freely and with knowledge of the dangers. Smokers should therefore expect to pay more for medical treatment that non-smokers. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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In the past decade, there has been a huge rise in the number of smokers. People are opting
this
 habit really quickly, some believe smoking to be stress buster and some just do it as a fashion trend. But whatsoever these people are choosing
this
 habit out of their free will and they are well aware of the dangers involved with it.
This
 has lead to an ongoing debate about whether smokers should pay extra for their medical treatment or not. Well, I agree that they should pay more.
This
 essay will discuss some of the reasons for my agreement.
Firstly
, the most important factor for implementing expensive medical treatment for smokers is that by doing so some of them may quit smoking due to money issues.
For instance
, there are many people who do it just to show off, with an increase in hospitalization expenditures they will surely prefer to leave
this
 fashion.
Secondly
, when smoking both active and passive smokers are getting affected. The active smoker is doing it intentionally, but the person standing
next
 to him may not even like that.
Thus
, while smoking they are not only harming themselves, but
also
 affecting other people. Another main reason is that smokers are adopting
this
 habit at the cost of inheriting many linked diseases. If they are willing to accept all the disadvantages than they can
also
 pay a little more. At the end, they will have to choose between the two.
Lastly
, by sparing some money from people who are intentionally accepting diseases, government can utilize it
for
Suggestion
to
 the needy and poor who are innocents and deserve basic medical treatments. To conclude, if smokers choose smoking over hospital expenses,
then
 that's their choice to make and they can
also
 afford to pay high. But, if there are some who are willing to choose their health than government should provide them with cheap rehabilitation centres to help them.
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