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In some countries people prefer to live alone more often than in the past. Do you think is a positive or a negative development? Why?

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In the recent years, most people, particularly in developed countries, likely to opt for living independently.
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 living solo come along with several drawbacks, I would consider
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 more of a positive development. For several reasons, living alone may have some drawbacks.
Firstly
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, living independently can be extremely costly as
life
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 is becoming increasingly complex and property price is just skyrocketing.
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 has created a difficult situation in finding an accommodation at a reasonable price. For
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 reason, single occupants may have to work unbelievably hard to make their ends meet. Being a singleton has meant that they cannot expect any financial or moral support from family or relatives in most cases. Lone occupants are more likely to experience depression, anxiety and uncertainty with bearing all household responsibilities on top of pursuing a work
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 than family-oriented people.
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, single people tend to lead a hectic as well as burdensome
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 with having a feeling of being resented and anguished and
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 resulting an unhealthy lifestyle.
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, I believe that people, leading a
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 as single dwellers are the lucky one. A sense of freedom with an acute privacy is something considered as the most desirable element of a happy
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.
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 is the main reason why single occupant tends to be seen as a successful peer of the society. Because living a
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 on their own allows them to invest a precious time in the developmental growth and shaping out their personality.
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, single people are likely to attend more public social affairs,
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 allowing cities and urban areas to reinvigorate as they spend more money on holiday-making, doing outdoor activities or surfing other services compared to their couple counterparts.
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, if more people became independent, the more they live greener by living in apartments or near to towns
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 of living in suburb houses and commuting to work from far away stretched distances. To sum up, going solo may have some disadvantages, but I would argue that
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 development should be seen as a progression.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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