Many teenagers now have their own smart phone. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion.

An increasing number of teens now possess a mobile phone. The main advantage of
this
is that it allows teenagers to stay in touch with their families and the main drawback is they waste too much time using apps.
This
essay will argue that overall
this
is a negative development. Smart mobile devices enable parents to keep track of their children and
this
keeps them safe.
That is
to say that young people can send their parents an email or call to let them know where they are. Even if the child is devious and tells their parents a lie, there are apps that can tell the adults exactly where they are.
For example
, the app KidCheck uses GPS to tell guardians. Where their loved ones are at all times,
thus
enabling them to find their young one quickly in an emergency.
However
, having an iPhone or Android phone can
also
lead to screen addiction. The main issue is that teenagers spend too much time staring at a screen
instead
of actually interacting with other people or studying.
This
is a problem because most apps do not teach teenagers anything useful, but
instead
encourage them to passively consume useless information.
For instance
, social networking apps like SnapChat or Facebook, have mostly gossip about them and are a complete waste of time compared to reading a book or having a real conversation.
This
essay,
therefore
, believes that smart phones are dangerous and teenagers should be discouraged from using them. In conclusion,
although
mobiles allow parents to keep tabs on teenagers,
this
does not overcome the fact that teens are wasting too many hours looking at a display when they should be living their life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • communication
  • access to information
  • safety and security
  • entertainment
  • educational opportunities
  • addiction
  • excessive screen time
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • distraction
  • lack of focus
  • privacy concerns
  • social disconnection
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • opinion
  • outweigh
  • limits
  • screen time
  • online safety
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