Many educated and successful people, such as doctors, lawyers, and computer scientists, are leaving developing countries where they grew up and moving to developed countries to live permanently. Discuss some problems with this trend and offer some possible solutions.

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are doing many

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, tend to leave developing

contries

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countries

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countries

in order to live forever.

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essay will examine the problems with

this

trend and discuss some possible solutions. There are some influences

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developing

countries

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these

countries

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people

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effection of growing up

countries

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as successfully as others. As

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results

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, these

countries

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down and can not afford to compete

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other developing

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generation by generation but if the

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one who is

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to another country so there will

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more connection between generations. Recommended solutions to

this

issue might be trying to improve the quality and condition

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distinguished

people

in developing

countries

. One of the

reason

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why they move to developed

countries

is not

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afford

and demand.

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for them to promote

theirselves

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, where they were born and

grown

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up, are really meaningful

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everyone anyway.

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received in the past in their

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by opening the

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thematic

to educate them when they were young.

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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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Many educated and successful people, such as doctors, lawyers, and computer scientists, are leaving developing countries where they grew up and moving to developed countries to live permanently. Discuss some problems with this trend and offer some possible solutions.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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