Many educated and successful people, such as doctors, lawyers, and computer scientists, are leaving developing countries where they grew up and moving to developed countries to live permanently. Discuss some problems with this trend and offer some possible solutions.

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are doing many
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such
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as in law, science, technology,
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, tend to leave developing
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countries
and move to developed
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countries
in order to live forever.
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essay will examine the problems with
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trend and discuss some possible solutions. There are some influences
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will drop the number of dominant
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effection of growing up
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. There are no more talented
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to carry out experiments, surgeons,
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as successfully as others. As
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results
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, these
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be falling
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down and can not afford to compete
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other developing
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, experiences are
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transmitted
generation by generation but if the
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one who is
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moving
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moves
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to another country so there will
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more connection between generations. Recommended solutions to
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issue might be trying to improve the quality and condition
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distinguished
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in developing
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. One of the
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why they move to developed
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is not
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their
efford
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afford
and demand.
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, they find out another better environment, salary,
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and condition
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condition
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conditions
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for them to promote
theirselves
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themselves
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, developing
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, where they were born and
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up, are really meaningful
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everyone anyway.
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,
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gifted
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should think about what they
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received in the past in their
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by opening the
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thematic
to educate them when they were young.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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