Currently there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine. However, at best these methods are ineffective, and at worst they may be dangerous. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Although
, modern
health
industry suggests
variety
Suggestion
a variety
of nontraditional kind of
medecines
the branches of medical science that deal with nonsurgical techniques
medicines
medicine
, many of them may be neither effective nor dangerous. I totally support the idea above as the positive effect from alternative methods are not proofed and looks more like
scam
Suggestion
a scam
.
To begin
with, there is no
science
Suggestion
scientific
evidence of
spectecular
sensational in appearance or thrilling in effect
spectacular
results related to
such
medical treatment
.
Accept space
.
Moreover
, in traditional medicine before getting a prescription, patients are checked up on allergies and possible body reactions
on
Suggestion
to
certain drugs
.
Accept space
.
In
this
case, medications will be taken for
health
improvement with no harmful consequences.
However
, unusual methods of medicine don’t follow current procedures which might create pretty dangerous obstacles on the way to heal. Recent research of Ontario
Health
Service showed that 35% of Canadians were hospitalized after taking alternative
medecines
the branches of medical science that deal with nonsurgical techniques
medicines
medicine
in 2018.
Also
, with increasing amount of the above mentioned forms of
health
cure
the work of providing treatment for or attending to someone or something
care
, people feel that the modern
health
industry is stealing money from their pockets. Nowadays, the market of
homeopathy
Suggestion
Homeopathy
offers numerous of products which are way more expensive than traditional medicines. It tends to suggest that unfair people found a new form of making money.
For instance
, US government issued a video how
medical sector
Suggestion
the medical sector
gets profit from unconventional medicines. To put it in a
nushell
the shell around the kernel of a nut
nutshell
, between traditional and nontraditional medical
cure alternative
Accept comma addition
cure, alternative
therapies shouldn’t be an option due to absence of
expertise
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expert
opinion about
impact
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the impact
on human
health
.
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