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Nowadays many people choose to be self employed,rather than to work for a company.

An increasing number of people today are opting to start
,
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,
 their own companies
instead
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 of working for a company, as they do not like to work under others or attracted by increased income through business.
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However self
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However, self
employment
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 has many drawbacks
such
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 as unexpected failure of business and loss of money. People are attracted by many successful businessmen and try to be
their
in or at that place
there
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boss
the lowest part of the musical range
bass
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 through business or some other areas
such
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 as writers, designers and artists. People are attracted by the benefits of flexible working hours as well as freedom of creation, which means that they do not need to punch in and out
everyday
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every day
. In self-
employment
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 the employer is the boss.
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, there are many drawbacks too for self-
employment
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.
Monthly
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The monthly
 fixed income if the benefit of
employment
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 under an organization, whereas it is not possible in the self
employment
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. Annual leave, emergency leave and sick leave are a part of organizational
employment
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 without affecting the monthly salary. In
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conclusion, even though
conclusion even though
selfemployment
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self employed
self employment
 has many advantages
,
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,
the drawbacks are more.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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