The use of mobile phone is as antisocial as smoking. Smoking is banned in certain places so mobile phone should be banned like smoking. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Mobile phones are
very innovative creation
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a very innovative creation
very innovative creations
of science, inspire of that, sometimes people says mobile phones should be banned in certain places because using mobile phones are antisocial as smoking. I
am totally agree
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totally agree
with
this
agreement, because I believe mobile phones are as harmful as smoking so it should be banned.
First
of all, we can say that mobile phones can damage people’s relationship, because people are paying too much attention to the social networks like
facebook
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Facebook
,
instagram
, tweeter,
whats
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what's
app
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
rather than their relationships. As an example, we mostly see that when a couple is
setting
(photography) the act of assuming a certain position (as for a photograph or portrait)
sitting
together they use most of their time
in
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on
mobile phones
instead
of spending time with each other, they are talking
on
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about
the messenger more than talking face to face.
Secondly
, mobile phones create a radio signal or a vibe which is harmful for our health &
also
for
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in
nature. As an example, the report of the natural science says that mobile phones are creating electromagnetic waves which are harmful
for
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to
birds, fishes &
also
for
soil
a particular instance of selling
sale
. Birds are rapidly dying for these electromagnetic waves.
In addition
, these radio signals are
also
harmful for our body. It affects the metabolism in the human brain cells & it
also
can cause brain cancer or brain
tumor
an abnormal new mass of tissue that serves no purpose
tumour
tumours
.
Moreover
, mobile phones can disturb others. As an example, mobile phones can annoy someone when they try to concentrate something important, like
library
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a library
libraries
the library
, office meeting, gallery or
also
when someone in sleep. In conclusion, we can say that all these problems we face are created by us & if we can control or maintain the use of mobile phones,
than
subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)
then
there won’t be a problem.
Otherwise it
Accept comma addition
Otherwise, it
should be banned in certain places like smoking.
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