The use of mobile phone is as antisocial as smoking. Smoking is banned in certain places so mobile phone should be banned like smoking. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Mobile phones are

very innovative creation

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a very innovative creation

very innovative creations

of science, inspire of that, sometimes people says mobile phones should be banned in certain places because using mobile phones are antisocial as smoking. I

am totally agree

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totally agree

with

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agreement, because I believe mobile phones are as harmful as smoking so it should be banned.

First

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of all, we can say that mobile phones can damage people’s relationship, because people are paying too much attention to the social networks like

facebook

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Facebook

instagram

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, tweeter,

whats

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what's

app

etc

continuing in the same way

etc.

rather than their relationships. As an example, we mostly see that when a couple is

setting

(photography) the act of assuming a certain position (as for a photograph or portrait)

sitting

together they use most of their time

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mobile phones

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of spending time with each other, they are talking

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about

the messenger more than talking face to face.

Secondly

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, mobile phones create a radio signal or a vibe which is harmful for our health &

also

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for

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nature. As an example, the report of the natural science says that mobile phones are creating electromagnetic waves which are harmful

for

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birds, fishes &

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for

soil

a particular instance of selling

sale

. Birds are rapidly dying for these electromagnetic waves.

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, these radio signals are

also

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harmful for our body. It affects the metabolism in the human brain cells & it

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can cause brain cancer or brain

tumor

an abnormal new mass of tissue that serves no purpose

tumour

tumours

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, mobile phones can disturb others. As an example, mobile phones can annoy someone when they try to concentrate something important, like

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a library

libraries

the library

, office meeting, gallery or

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when someone in sleep. In conclusion, we can say that all these problems we face are created by us & if we can control or maintain the use of mobile phones,

than

subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)

then

there won’t be a problem.

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Otherwise it

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Otherwise, it

should be banned in certain places like smoking.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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288 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

antisocial
social interactions
negative impacts
banning
regulated
completely banned
education
awareness campaigns
responsible
mobile phone use

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The use of mobile phone is as antisocial as smoking. Smoking is banned in certain places so mobile phone should be banned like smoking. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

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The obesity rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many developed countries. discuss some possible reasons for this problem and suggest solutions

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?