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You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter 1. describe what you enjoyed about the course 2. say how much cooking you have done since the course 3. suggest another cookery course you'd like the school to offer

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to give my testimony for the short cooking
course
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 making Punjabi curries, which I finished
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 your school
last
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 month.
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 and foremost, the thing which I liked the most was the duration and practicality of the
course
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.
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,
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 there were many dishes to prepare and learn for,
curriculum
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 was extensive enough to cover all.
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 to that, I enjoyed learning new ways to prepare
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same
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 curries from other team members and learnt to give
personalised
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 touch of making dishes spicy. Ever since I finished the training
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 cooking, I moved to Europe for a new job. Here I need to cook my food
everyday
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 due to my dietary restrictions, but fortunately, because of what I learned from the
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, I enjoyed cooking every single day. I tried to make different sweet and spicy curries every alternate day to take my tiffin to the office. I spend 45 minutes of time
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cooking daily. As I enjoy eating Indian
sweets
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, I would like your school to organize
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a similar
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 short program of training for preparing
sweets
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, those
sweets
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are been made from chick piece flour, sugar and condensed milk. I cannot wait to see
my self
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 making
sweets
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 like Rasagulla and Gulab jamun. I recommend
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course
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 to all cooking
enthusiast
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 and look forward to learning new items in future. Yours faithfully,
Mr.
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 Manan Trivedi.

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