Some people think that people who are over 60 years old should not work and should be made to retire. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is often thought by some that individuals more than 60 years of age out to stop work and take retirement. In my opinion, I do not agree with

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view, I believe that, if people will continue to perform

working

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work

, it will be beneficial for them as well as for the whole society. One of the main reasons why workers should continue even after their age of retirement is their contribution in

collection

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the collection

of taxes.

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, if they will continue to do duties, they will be able to pay

levy

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the levy

a levy

,

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, will become part of the economy of the country. In

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way, not only the burden of paying taxes on the shoulders of young generation will become

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less, but

also

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leads to the improvement of overall financial conditions of the government.

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, the economy of the China is growing at an exponential rate because the older generation is

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contributing in generating income and paying taxes. Another good reason to argue against early retirement is the degrading health of

elder

advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)

older

people. It is widely accepted that those people who remain physically active generally enjoy better health compared to those who leads sedentary life.

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, to remain in work cycle is not only beneficial for the body of an

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individual, but

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has a beneficial aspect

for

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of

the government because

less number

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the less number

a less number

of ill people means less number of

hopsitals

a health facility where patients receive treatment

hospitals

requirement.

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, the older segment of

population

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the population

would not fell

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would not fall

socially isolated by remaining socially active in

field

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the field

. In conclusion,

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some proponents

propse

make a proposal, declare a plan for something

propose

proposes

that the maximum age limit of working should be 60, I think that it is an

advantageous

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advantage

to work out

through out

all the way through

throughout

life for a person himself as well as for the whole community.