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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages?

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Information
technology
 is one of the most important aspect of our life. And it is marching towards acme
day
 by
day
, with high speed. But, as it has its pros, it
also
 has its cons which affects our
day
 to
day
 living, at home as well as at work. I personally think, it is not as it looks like, and it has many positive things attached to it.
Firstly
, I would like to put light on the things, which we can do, by sitting in a house. There are many different works, which we can complete online,
instead
 of going and standing in line. All types of bills like electricity, water, TV, and house rent can be paid from anywhere, in a click of a button. I Know a person, of age 65, who used to stand in line for all
this
 work, no pay, all his bills in the house, sitting on a chair.
Hence
, information
technology
 has abated all time and the extra efforts we used to put to complete
this
 works. Moving
further
, we can
also
 talk to people who are way far from us.
For example
, we can call as well as see them on mobile through Skype or what's up. It helped us to keep in touch with our loved once, even if they are away from us. There is a neighbour of mine, who talks to his daughter who is in Canada, on what's up video call. So the
technology
 has
also
 brought people closer even if they are far from you.
Next
 is, there are many news channels, which shows every
day
 news to us. The news keeps us updated about many things which in turn helps to improve our general knowledge. It is very easy to access news from our mobile. One can simply take out his mobile from a pocket, and by opening any application, can see live news. In conclusion, I would like to say that information
technology
 has reduced our stress and frustration by making our
day
 to
day
 work easier and
hence
 outweigh the disadvantages.
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