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There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a small family rather than a large family?

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Due to the
economy
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economic
 recession in the world recently, families have oughted to having a minimal family than
have
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having
 much family, these are are
result
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the result
 of various
advantagous
the quality of having a superior or more favorable position
advantages
 factors
such
 as economic recession, increasing education
,
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,
 medicals and upkeep of their family
.
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.
However many
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However, many
 disadvantages of keeping a small
family
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family, such
such
 a death
,
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,
 restriction on selection cannot be over-looked
Firstly
, increasing rise in goods and services are a major factor while
family
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families
 have resulted to have a minimal family, as the cost of education for their offsprings have been on the rise in relation to their salary monthly
,
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,
in addition
 the cost for upkeep of
large family
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the large family
large families
a large family
 is difficult to achieve following the inflation on our societies which has been a disadvantage having
large family
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a large family
large families
.
Secondly
, a major advantage is access to best medicals, which is a fundamental to life, while small range family can access the best medicals at a lower cost which cannot be accessed if families are large
therefore
 helping in increasing the total
gdp
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GDP
 of the country. While these can be addressed the disadvantages of having a small family cannot be ignored
However
, large family can promote growth to the capital income as they are exposed to various occupation and opportunities which small family cannot achieve In conclusion,while having a large family can be beneficial so as to promote economy growth, small family is the best trend to adopt in our recent economy to withstand recession

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